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Press Release Example - Corrections
Areas for improvement
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There is no indication that this
is a Press Release. Therefore the words PRESS RELEASE
need to be added.
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A contact name should be included,
not just the word “vicar”
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Using the word “tercentenary” in
the 1st paragraph assumes that everyone knows
what a tercentenary is. It would be better to mention
“300 years” early on
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It is not until the 2nd
paragraph that the precise date and time of the concert
is mentioned. It would be advisable to include this
information in the 1st paragraph, rather than
a vague mention of “on Friday”
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It is important to indicate that
the Press Release has finished. The word ENDS should be
added.
With these amendments inserted, the Press
Release would now look like this:
DIBLEY PARISH CHURCH
Church Street
DIBLEY, Suffolk. IP1 1GG
United Kingdom
PRESS RELEASE
02
May 2009
AMERICAN CHOIR JOIN
CHURCH CELEBRATIONS IN
DIBLEY
The choir of First
Parish in Dibley,
Massachusetts will be
joining the celebrations
of the 300-year-old
Dibley Parish Church on
Friday, 5th May, at
7-30p.m.
The American choir
(whose home town is also
celebrating its
tercentenary), will be
performing a programme
of 'Three Centuries of
American Song' at the
parish church which is
one of Suffolk’s
historic places of
worship. Admission is
free.
Earlier in the day
choir-members will visit
the ancestral Suffolk
town of Dibley where
they will be received by
members of the Dibley
Parish congregation and
the chair of the parish
council, Mr. David
Horton.
ENDS
Contact Details -
Geraldine Granger
Telephone: 01234
567890 Email:
vicar@dibley.org.uk
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